Jazz Angels (Revised)
K.C. Jazz Angels
For Milton Morris
Bill Basie playing sweet riffs
Swinging “One O’Clock Jump”
12th Street, Reno Club
Lester Young’s hot tenor sax blowin’
chorus with the Count
Jam,
Jazz,
Swing,
Jazz Angels
Wild jump blues, shake the bandstand
Reefer dances, drifts
like a voodoo blue haze
up from the band.
Charlie Parker, looking for that swing fix
too young to blow
leans over the balcony
digging Lester under a crawdad moon,
blowmanblow.
Woodsheds on stoops,
back alleys, waiting for the nod.
Jam
Jazz
Swing
Jazz Angels
January 13, 2008 at 10:23 pm
Scot the fact that I immediately spotted the changes is testament to how good the poem is — it had gone straight into my head! I like the revisions, they work perfectly though it was great before……I also like how you revise in this way, I sneak back in and make changes constantly, which I really shouldn’t do (laughing).
January 14, 2008 at 10:19 pm
Jo
I can’t help sneaking back in–it is a constant process, but I usually don’t repost them. I had to on this one. Thanks for the visit!
January 16, 2008 at 2:34 pm
great atmosphere you’ve evoked here, very jazz
January 17, 2008 at 11:55 am
Green Poet
Thank you for the comments and stopping in. Let the sun shine in Scotland!
January 20, 2008 at 3:50 pm
Hidy Scot,
I love what you’ve done with the rhythm of this piece, the way you grouped the words together to give it a true “jazz” sound. I don’t think I would have thought to do that and I think it makes it so rich and full of life. You’ve personified a place and an era in this piece. I read carefully and I can honestly say that I don’t see anything that I feel should be changed. The images and the sounds of this peice are just astonishing.
Nochipa
January 21, 2008 at 8:56 pm
Thanks for the read and stopping in.