Watercolor–The Color of Zen

Well, the middle of Watercolor (scroll down) was a bit off–maybe difficult as was said. It was awkward without obvious help. The first stanza was Zen-like–well close to it. You can see the omissions and additions. Does it work? What is Zen? Like the masters say, if I explain it–it isn’t Zen. so, the real question…is this poem any better for it?  I can say that read aloud–it has a better flow…