Haiku Island Love Sonnet
stealing island sex
hidden behind the ferns
and the rare hibiscus
our hemp hammock swings
between two curved coco palms
short steps from the sand
the blue water breeze
caresses us like magic silk
pulled over naked
strangers locked into
a single rhythm of wind
love and gentle waves
I remember you
were as lonely as I
May 7, 2008 at 9:27 pm
dang.. that one is nice to ,, you are on a roll over here…that closing statement just makes it!!!
May 7, 2008 at 9:29 pm
last island ditty for a bit
May 8, 2008 at 12:16 am
hmmm very nice
May 8, 2008 at 12:25 am
Nice memoir piece… lush without being lascivious, just the right amount of mystique.
May 8, 2008 at 9:36 am
Yes, the last two lines really alter it, I liked it, particularly how the ’swings’ gives it momentum.
May 8, 2008 at 10:42 am
Thanks kim
May 8, 2008 at 10:44 am
Bob
when is the fish fry?
May 8, 2008 at 10:45 am
JO
May 8, 2008 at 1:03 pm
lovely. gets better and better with each stanza. i feel the swings in the poem too.
May 8, 2008 at 4:20 pm
i hope my upcoming vacation is as exciting..
May 8, 2008 at 10:29 pm
lissa
thanks for the kind words
May 8, 2008 at 10:30 pm
K
make it a good one!
May 9, 2008 at 12:20 pm
Delicious!