having sex with her
is like
ready
set
action
cut
o.k.
that’s a wrap
(not inspired at all at the home front, but from Rodger’s recent trip to LA…you can find him writing about Bukowski over at Carver’s Dog
Be Not Inhospitable to Strangers
Lest They be Angels in Disguise
May 13, 2008 at 4:07 am
This reminded me of the Paris Hilton video (I have never actually seen it) … I remember the furor created in the nineties with Rob Lowe being caught on video. It seems very common now for celebrity sex to turn up on the internet.
That aside - I like the short and sharp lines of the haiku… it is almost mechanical and breaks the rhythm up in an interesting way. I think I will start experimenting with line length.
thanks
May 13, 2008 at 6:19 am
Okay, laughing my ass off, not at the 17 syllables but at your not inspired on the homefront get out of jail card
Great lay out (pardon the very funny if I say so myself pun).
May 13, 2008 at 6:20 am
Oh, so that is a haiku? I thought they could only have 3 lines.. Apart from such carping, it’s neat.
May 13, 2008 at 7:21 am
[...] MA’AM: Over at Be Not Inhospitable To Strangers, Scot Young has crafted a nice haiku sonnet, 17 Syllable Sex, inspired, he says, by the online journal of my brief return visit to [...]
May 13, 2008 at 10:16 am
Vincent
No, not a haiku–only in th esense that it has 17 syllables and in these times that does not hold true. It could be a urban haiku/street haiku in the bastard form, but not close to the true Japanese form.
May 13, 2008 at 10:17 am
Kim
thanks for the comments!
May 13, 2008 at 10:18 am
Jo
ok–that comment didn’t help things–haha
May 14, 2008 at 1:59 am
Takes me back to all those wasted days and nights spent on L.A. porn sets in the early and late 90’s, Scot.
May 14, 2008 at 2:14 am
Rodger
inspired of your posts and trip
May 14, 2008 at 5:40 am
I’m flattered, Scot. I just posted an update on the trip, a lost moment or an afterthought, if you will, that I think dovetails nicely with this piece.