I spend my time
collecting stones
large ones for strong corners
flats for the cap
cobbles for plugging
the holes mixed
each day
to hold it strong
I spend my time
collecting stones
working in layers
laying each one to fit
like a puzzle
in this perfect wall
that protects the things
I own
and sometimes own me
I spend my time
collecting stones
set them around this
ancient oak
spreading arching
protects from sun
and storms
built high enough
to dream well under
a marauding moon
I spend my time
collecting stones
my father’s trade
this art passed down
with bleeding hands
fit to chisels
chipping stones
making them fit
sealing it up
I spend my time
collecting stones
but sometimes I
leave one out
of the perfect wall
……..one rock removed just
long enough for you
to slip in
before new mortar
is mixed
I cannot tell you
where it is
run your hand slowly
over the surface
……..there
do you see it?
(my attempt at bukowski’s bluebird challenge)

July 3, 2008 at 1:01 am
ooh love the feel, flow, and repetition. i thought this was beautiful, scot.
July 3, 2008 at 2:48 am
oh i love this one… i love repetition,, when used correctly,, as you did in this piece,, it is the mortar between the words of stone… oh i love this one…..
July 3, 2008 at 6:54 am
Very beautiful and meditative, the repitition suits the subject matter very well
July 3, 2008 at 9:09 am
Hi Scot
I enjoyed this!
July 3, 2008 at 10:27 am
Thank you lissa
July 3, 2008 at 10:28 am
paisley
thank you–it was inspired by bukowski’s bluebird
July 3, 2008 at 10:29 am
Juliet
thanks for reading–always appreciated
July 3, 2008 at 10:29 am
Hey Pris
hope things are well–what happened to sketchbook?
July 3, 2008 at 10:49 am
I’m glad you left one stone out, if for no other reason just to let us know that perfection takes many forms. Nice flow, nice pace, nice poem…
July 3, 2008 at 1:34 pm
I like the repetition and how you build each stanza off of it. It kind of weaves all together. Nice write.
-Nicole
July 3, 2008 at 1:49 pm
Thanks Bob-not sure what perfection is?
July 3, 2008 at 1:49 pm
Nicole
Thank you for reading–
July 3, 2008 at 2:52 pm
Ha! English teacher, eh? heehee
July 3, 2008 at 6:42 pm
like the idea of plugging the holes each day to make the perfect wall strong… happiness takes work…
July 3, 2008 at 7:33 pm
Bob
always revise–now.
July 3, 2008 at 7:34 pm
pieceofpie
thank you for stopping in-:)
July 3, 2008 at 11:17 pm
You have the meter down perfectly. The repetition of “I spend my time collecting stones” is excellent. I can hear the wall being built. Each word is one stone on top of another. And “fit to chisels/chipping stones” is so damned musical!! I’m sorry to dwell on the nuts and bolts of the poem, when I should be commenting on the beauty (and it is beautiful). But I am so fascinated by your mastery of the craft. Excellent again, Scot!
July 3, 2008 at 11:48 pm
I like the repetitive line, too. Was there more than just the repetition about Bukowski’s Bluebird that inspired you?
July 3, 2008 at 11:52 pm
I think that he kept it hid–the theme of it–the image sometimes we have to put up for whatever reason–maybe
July 4, 2008 at 1:05 am
Julie
Bukowski made this one easy. Thanks
July 4, 2008 at 9:55 am
You did a really great job with this, really great. I too love the repetition, but best of all is the idea in those stones