Watercolor–The Color of Zen

Well, the middle of Watercolor (scroll down) was a bit off–maybe difficult as was said. It was awkward without obvious help. The first stanza was Zen-like–well close to it. You can see the omissions and additions. Does it work? What is Zen? Like the masters say, if I explain it–it isn’t Zen. so, the real question…is this poem any better for it?  I can say that read aloud–it has a better flow…

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2 Responses to Watercolor–The Color of Zen

  1. Pris says:

    I like the revision. I don’t think you need to worry about whether Zen has a color or not….an unanswerable question. The poem works. That’s the bottom line. Good one, Scot!

  2. Scot says:

    Pris
    Thanks for the early morning read. You are correct in saying “an unanswerable question” I appreciate your comments as always!

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