A Haiku Love Sonnet–

blue-moon.jpg  –Waiting for the End of Yesterday

sometimes we travel
deep into this naked night
and see yesterday

eager to reconstruct
bits of a fragmented dream
with lost dialogue

wait for fading light
to kiss the soft of angel
wings warmed by the day

not an easy job
turning the orange sky dark
not an easy job

rearranging the planets
hanging a blue moon

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26 Responses to A Haiku Love Sonnet–

  1. Wow, that’s a unique kind of poem! Well done!

  2. hanging a blue moon

    Excellent!

  3. Sumedh says:

    brilliant, really;

  4. Jo says:

    My favourite of yours…….no hang on, that’s, oh I can’t decide. WONDERFUL!

  5. Scot says:

    Cendrine
    Thanks for the kind words. Welcome!

  6. Scot says:

    Rodger
    My favorite line too==makes a cliche somewhat unique.

  7. Scot says:

    Sumedth
    A fellow blogger may have invented the style–it is fun to play with. The brilliance is not mine–just the words. 🙂

  8. Scot says:

    Jo
    Thanks 🙂

  9. cattledog5 says:

    I really like how each of the stanzas is self contained and also part of the whole. I think I would like it better if the last stanza was a whole haiku

  10. Pris says:

    Since I write haiku, it was especially interesting to see the basic form transformed into another direction. I like this very much.

  11. Bob says:

    Hit this one out of the park, Scot… I love it. I’ve never read anything quite like it.

  12. Scot says:

    Bob
    thanks–sometimes I can fall in the outhouse and come out smelling like a rose–dreary day down by the bootheel.

  13. Scot says:

    Matt
    I wondered about that too–but this form calls for 14 lines to be a sonnet–but when it has been invented from other forms–well heck. Thanks for the comment

  14. Scot says:

    Pris
    Thanks Pris–I may submit somewhere–any suggestions?

  15. beautiful imagery, interesting use of haiku

  16. Paul says:

    Original thought, original imagery, beautiful texture, wonderful poem,

  17. Scot says:

    Green Poet
    🙂

  18. JO says:

    Truly remarkable. I love the spin, the images, the color.

  19. Scot says:

    Paul
    thanks for the comment

    JO
    just wandered out and fell on the paper 🙂

  20. Ali says:

    This is one of the most beautiful haiku I have ever read, Scot. And the fact that it’s a sonnet…well…I’m particular to those….Deep into the naked night reminds me of Dylan Thomas’s Do not go gentle into that good night. Mmm. Tell me. When will I start breathing again?

  21. Scot says:

    Ali
    This just might be my favorite for now–it could be turned into a villanelle.

  22. Joe Felso says:

    I love the surreal undercurrent in this poem, and it’s interesting to see my form in another writer’s hands. It makes me wonder how much of writing is in form and how much in is the mind of the writer. Reading this, I’m favoring the latter. —D

  23. Scot says:

    Thanks D
    I think the form helped–no doubt, but I guess it is always what the writer does with it.

  24. nectarfizz says:

    (shivers) I love the moon…

  25. janetleigh says:

    Stunning, Scot. Every word. Love the last 2 killer lines! And the photo – well, it’s gorgeous. Not easy finding one – once in a blue moon! heh heh I hope you don’t mind if I ask you if you write to the photo, or write, then try to find a photo to match? I love haiku, and I love Joe Felso, too; creator of the form, but I have to tell you – you’ve matched his caliber in all respects with your sonnet haiku. And not to change the subject 🙂 but I want to thank you for stopping by and leaving me such lovely words on my most recent ku. So very appreciated.

  26. Scot says:

    Janet
    Thanks for the kind words–The poem always comes first…the other way around just doesn’t seem right. Thanks for stopping by, please do again.

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