Shipwreck

It was on a Tuesday
that the ice retreated
for another year
waiting at the bottom
like the wreck
of the Edmund
Fitzgerald
it was on this
Tuesday
no
survivors
were listed
it is this
hard-water
captain
not suited
for the
early
loons
ready
to cry
your
name.

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26 Responses to Shipwreck

  1. NW Limited says:

    Very nice…melancholy.

  2. nectarfizz says:

    ready to cry out your name….oohh lovely.

  3. Paul says:

    I love that song. I used to listen to it over and over. It’s a complex poem, the idea fades and echoes like an harmonic,

  4. Scot says:

    Paul
    Great song and the wreck was tragic

  5. Scot says:

    NW
    hey thanks for dropping in–stick around this month

  6. johemmant says:

    I like this, you’re doing well with your nanowripo,

  7. Scot says:

    nectarfizz
    glad you liked it…

  8. Scot says:

    Jo
    thanks Jo
    I am going to slip some haikus in for the weekend–backoff a bit until Monday.

  9. The loons are a nice melancholic touch of atmosphere

  10. Sara says:

    This brings to mind the movie The Perfect Storm to me. It really captures the heartbreak of a sitution like that well while contrasting it to the harshness that this is just what happens out on the water and will happen again. Nice work.

  11. ~beth says:

    This has a wonderful melancholic touch to it. A sadness wonderfully echoed by the loons.

  12. Does anyone know where the love of God goes
    When the words turn the minutes to hours …

  13. Scot says:

    Green Poet
    yes the loons are just that, if not haunting

  14. Scot says:

    Sara
    never saw it,but yes heartbreak and stormy for sure

  15. Scot says:

    Beth
    thanks for the visit and comment–nothing can be as sad as a loon

  16. Scot says:

    Rodger
    not sure what that means?

  17. Lyrics from “The Wreck of the Edmund Fitzgerald”, Scot.

  18. Scot says:

    oh well–usually hear this at the Irish Pub–can’t recall mumbling along to that line

  19. It’s in the last stanza, actually. A very verbose song, lyrically speaking, probably the best piece Gordon Lightfoot ever recorded. Is he still around? Hmmm.

  20. Scot says:

    Rodger
    Not sure where he is–he is about 70–I heard an Irish trio play it in a pub with a guitar and hand drum in Charleston–last year–as good as his–spent some time around the Apostle Islands on lake Superior–I suppose that is how it got in this poem

  21. I don’t think anything “got into” your poem, Scot. It’s yors and yours alone.

  22. poetry4kids says:

    I love your lyrics….

    I checked out Gordon Lightfoot’s
    The Wreck of the Edmund Fitzgerald

    The legend lives on from the Chippewa on down
    Of the big lake they called ‘Gitche Gumee’
    The lake, it is said, never gives up her dead…….

    There she is:-) so sad.

    Ciao, Milou

  23. Scot says:

    thanks Milou for the comments and stopping in

  24. Tina Trivett says:

    Gripping write, scot…well done.

  25. QuoinMonkey says:

    The Edmund Fitzgerald…I always think of it when I go up to Duluth and stand by Lake Superior. Many ghosts linger under her great surface. Floating free.

  26. Scot says:

    Yes, the big lake has many ghosts and the shipwrecks around the apostle islands are cool to paddle over

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