Stones

I spend my time
collecting stones
large ones for strong corners
flats for the cap
cobbles for plugging
the holes mixed
each day
to hold it strong

I spend my time
collecting stones
working in layers
laying each one to fit
like a puzzle
in this perfect wall
that protects the things
I own
and sometimes own me

I spend my time
collecting stones
set them around this
ancient oak
spreading arching
protects from sun
and storms
built high enough
to dream well under
a marauding moon

I spend my time
collecting stones
my father’s trade
this art passed down
with bleeding hands
fit to chisels
chipping stones
making them fit
sealing it up

I spend my time
collecting stones
but sometimes I
leave one out
of the perfect wall
……..one rock removed just
long enough for you
to slip in
before new mortar
is mixed
I cannot tell you
where it is

run your hand slowly
over the surface
……..there

do you see it?

(my attempt at bukowski’s bluebird challenge)

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21 Responses to Stones

  1. lissa says:

    ooh love the feel, flow, and repetition. i thought this was beautiful, scot.

  2. paisley says:

    oh i love this one… i love repetition,, when used correctly,, as you did in this piece,, it is the mortar between the words of stone… oh i love this one…..

  3. Very beautiful and meditative, the repitition suits the subject matter very well

  4. Pris says:

    Hi Scot
    I enjoyed this!

  5. Scot says:

    Thank you lissa 🙂

  6. Scot says:

    paisley
    thank you–it was inspired by bukowski’s bluebird

  7. Scot says:

    Juliet
    thanks for reading–always appreciated

  8. Scot says:

    Hey Pris
    hope things are well–what happened to sketchbook?

  9. Bob says:

    I’m glad you left one stone out, if for no other reason just to let us know that perfection takes many forms. Nice flow, nice pace, nice poem…

  10. I like the repetition and how you build each stanza off of it. It kind of weaves all together. Nice write.

    -Nicole

  11. scot says:

    Thanks Bob-not sure what perfection is?

  12. scot says:

    Nicole
    Thank you for reading–

  13. Bob says:

    Ha! English teacher, eh? heehee

  14. pieceofpie says:

    like the idea of plugging the holes each day to make the perfect wall strong… happiness takes work…

  15. Scot says:

    Bob
    always revise–now.

  16. Scot says:

    pieceofpie
    thank you for stopping in-:)

  17. You have the meter down perfectly. The repetition of “I spend my time collecting stones” is excellent. I can hear the wall being built. Each word is one stone on top of another. And “fit to chisels/chipping stones” is so damned musical!! I’m sorry to dwell on the nuts and bolts of the poem, when I should be commenting on the beauty (and it is beautiful). But I am so fascinated by your mastery of the craft. Excellent again, Scot!

  18. JO says:

    I like the repetitive line, too. Was there more than just the repetition about Bukowski’s Bluebird that inspired you?

  19. Scot says:

    I think that he kept it hid–the theme of it–the image sometimes we have to put up for whatever reason–maybe

  20. Scot says:

    Julie
    Bukowski made this one easy. Thanks

  21. johemmant says:

    You did a really great job with this, really great. I too love the repetition, but best of all is the idea in those stones 🙂

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