day 1

teen age sex
under a cheesy moon
eight track plays
croce low
time in a bottle
sets the mood
top down gives
us more room
you borrowed
yr sister’s
28 days of kama sutra
we had 20 minutes
before the porch light
came on
i prayed for 27 more
days just like
this one

13 Responses to day 1

  1. ybonesy says:

    croce low

    bringing back time in a bottle. nice.

  2. whypaisley says:

    i am so all about confession l poetry… just loved this one……

  3. this made me smile, i love the cheesy moon

  4. Excellent, Scot, the Jim Croce tune and the purloined Kama Sutra were evocative instruments in this piece. Ah, the anxieties of young love, blindly rushing fast into the future …

  5. Scot says:

    thanks to all of you

  6. Holly D says:

    Oh, time in a bottle is one of my faves,
    and this poem made me laugh a little,
    as I remember a similar time once!

  7. johemmant says:

    The title of this works very well. Good ending too.

  8. Memories come flooding back. I can feel a certain tension in this poem. Nicely written.

    Come and join my weekly poetry prompt on my website if interested.

  9. Kim says:

    Puts me in mind of Meatloaf’s Paradise by the dashboard light! Ah teenage angst and hormones…

  10. Julie says:

    I love the cheesy moon, the top down. Wonderful details in a beautiful poem!

  11. Scot says:

    thank you all for the comments and time

  12. motorgyre says:

    I really liked the contrast between 28 days and 20 minutes.

  13. Hi, big thanks for your work. I looked for something like that, but Icouldn’t find anything that’s exactly what I was looking for:( You helped me to save hours of my time.. Thanks again:D

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